2/25/11

Katharine's Kickstarter Copy







o   One person telling jokes is a class clown. A line up of people telling jokes is the kings of comedy.
o   Or
o   One person telling jokes is a class clown.  A line up of people telling jokes is a comedy club.

o   One person dancing is a screwball.  A company of people dancing is a ballet.



o   One person’s drawing is a doodle.  A group of people’s drawings is a gallery.

o   One person singing on a street corner is crazy.  A bunch of people singing is a choir.




o   One person dressing in a new style is called the freak of the week.  Many people dressing in a new style is called Fashion Week.

o   One person writing for herself is a journal.  A writer with a team is called a novelist.


o   One person acting is a liar.  A troupe of people acting is called theater. 

o   One person talking photos is a creeper.  A group of people in a studio is called professional. 

 

1 comment:

  1. Out of the lines posted, these are my recommendations for you, moving forward.

    One person telling jokes is a class clown.  A line up of people telling jokes is a comedy club.

    One person dancing is a screwball.  A company of people dancing is a ballet.

    One person singing on a street corner is crazy.  A bunch of people singing is a choir.

    One person dressing in a new style is called the freak of the week.  Many people dressing in a new style is called Fashion Week.

    Across the board, the second sentences are feeling a little forced. In some instances, like with Fashion Week, it feels repetitive. For some, you may to try flopping the line. For instance:

    One person dancing is a screwball.  Many dancers make up a ballet company.

    Lastly, words like 'screwball' and 'freak of the week' don't feel right. Find other options.

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