3/5/11

e.on website intro copy

Our EnergyCollector has been tasked with the gathering of excess energy that we spend in a daily basis. Most of the time, we spend more energy than actually needed in many of our activities. Our collector aims to accumulate this wasted energy and put it to good use. This website provides live data from the energy gathered at various locations across the UK and will keep you updated on what's to come.

Also have a Q about this. If we get this website working with the help of New Media student, will that be a collaboration? or it has to be illustrator or photographer?


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  1. Suggested edits:

    EnergyCollector helps harness excess energy we generate by performing normal activities on a daily basis. By accumulating this wasted energy, we can put it to better use. Here you'll find live data from the energy gathered at various locations across the UK--and receive updates on what's to come.

    Do you see how the above info has been simplified and condensed? There's a lot of excess wordage that can be stripped away. Only ever keep what's necessary.

    Yes to the New Media student question. You can collaborate with any department outside of advertising.

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  2. Thanks, yes it sounds much better now.

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