Spot: Hallelujah!
Length :56
SFX Beep! Beep! Beep! Alarm Clock
BORED MAN It’s 3am.
SFX Groan
MAN The birds aren’t even up.
SFX Crickets chirping.
MAN You only went to bed 3 hours ago.
SFX Yawn
MAN And now you fight the urge to pull the blankets back up.
SFX Groan
MAN Instead you try to put your head through the arm hole of your shirt.
SFX Inaudible frustration
MAN There’s the coffee maker.
SFX Drip Drip Drip Steam
MAN . Maybe 4 cups will be enough today.
SFX Yawn
MAN Traffic will be bad and it’s supposed to rain.
SFX Honking horns and pouring rain.
MAN But today will be the day when your luck will turn around.
SFX Chorus Hallelujah!
MAN Today is a new day and those sleepless nights will be worth it. Today will be the difference between failure and success.
SFX Cha-ching!
MAN Kickstarter.com. They’ll make you believe.
This is the radio spot that changed the way I feel about this campaign. Nice work.
ReplyDeleteI'd like you to work on the ending. I love the new details (head through arm hole, traffic and rain) but the end needs to work a bit harder.
This is the portion I want you to provide alternate options for:
MAN Today is a new day and those sleepless nights will be worth it. Today will be the difference between failure and success.
Lastly, need to see more tag options. At least 20. In general, if there's a 'they', we should know who 'they' are. In this case, we don't. Make sense?