Excellent work. Nearly approved! Minor tweaks:Spot 3: Change 'as long as' to 'so long as'. Also add 'for' to 'I get to hear you for just a moment longer.' Change last line. It's not as strong as your other endings.Spot 4: I see you with me -- not 'in me'.
Excellent work. Nearly approved! Minor tweaks:
ReplyDeleteSpot 3: Change 'as long as' to 'so long as'. Also add 'for' to 'I get to hear you for just a moment longer.' Change last line. It's not as strong as your other endings.
Spot 4: I see you with me -- not 'in me'.